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Joined: May 28, 2008
Comments posted: 3
Votes received: 2
A member of MENSA with degrees in English, Psychology, and Rhetoric from the University of Illinois at Champaign-Urbana. I work for a large pharmaceutical company.
October 25, 2011
April 17, 2008
The Heracles quote would more correctly read "You're our son, Heracles, and we your family." The third comma as written above is confusing, and its elimination helps to clear that up.
October 25, 2011, 1:34pm
There are many occasions in the English language where something that is not technically incorrect is still bad from a stylistic perspective. That's what I think you're dealing with here.
I suggest ending the initial part of the question with a colon, then following with the three items separated by commas or--if they're longer options--by semicolons. Bullet points are certainly an option, but I don't know the rules on how those are handled.
Best of luck.
May 28, 2008, 2:53pm
Thanks everyone for the help on this. We've resolved the issue to my satisfaction.
Much thanks also to "Nick-alias" for the National Geographic link.
May 28, 2008, 2:48pm
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